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he was the one i had written about before i met him 2 (Free verse) by rockinindividual
what are you gonna do
when he comes up next to you
swerving in the gravel on his bike
talking to you in the dwindling sunshine
your feet locating stones in the driveway
your toes moving them out of their mossy grooves
replacing them in between sentences
as he rolls back and forth on his bike
awkwardness in motion
your eyes are on the ground
intently watching the invisible
when suddenly he's right next to you
your head lifts in surprise
and he retreats
to a spot in the sun
that hides his eyes under the shadow of his hat
you look into the darkness
remembering the green
that you've watched flash
at the morning bus stop
"yeah, my boyfriend does that" you say
to his motorcycle story
a lie perhaps
but a reminder nevertheless
and you end the conversation
as the sun disappears beyond the power lines
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Posted: May 1, 2003 6:30 PM PDT; Last modified: May 1, 2003 6:30 PM PDT
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bit like a flashbulb memory but needs elaborating a bit I think with some insight