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Tomb (Lyric) by GekoHawaii
It all hit me at once Now I'm buried in this mess My lungs cry out for air As I pray for a quick death I scrape at caving walls Of this new stress fed tomb Orverwhelmed with chaos This pain will all end soon It's too late to turn back now I've done my share of harm The past can't be restored My life's lost all it's charm Do not show me pity Just let my world collide With daggers sharp as diamonds As my happiness dies

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3
Weighted score: 5.65
Overall Rank: 2122
Posted: March 7, 2003 10:05 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2003 10:05 PM PST
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[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 8-Mar-03/9:08 PM | Reply
blork
[8] Massokissed @ 62.252.224.6 | 2-Apr-03/10:46 PM | Reply
I like it, its just that last line... "as my hapiness dies" i dunno maybe i am just nitpicking. Very good.
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