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Free verse № 42770

No Sense

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Mar 2003 · Edited 30 Mar 2003 · 2 comments

He slides his booted step to the side his heart skips its beating. Like a bird lying lame on wet winter's hour of dawn. Like no approach he comes, like a tongue withdrawn. No sense, no truth, no armour's song was his, a mission of mercy, with no wrong? Stepping up his pace toward home. Up overcoming the top of the hill, the newest light is mounting to correct the marks through shadows cast left for yet others, still to last, while rising up from beyond, it leaves behind the battle cries and plenty of flesh and bone in sand, to dry where there his brothers lie.

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[n/a] horus8 7-Mar-03/12:12 AM Reply



Afterword 1 (Free verse) by daniella

He slides his step to the side,
and a heart skips its beating.
Like a bird lying lame on the wet winter hour of dawn.
Like no approach he comes, like a tongue withdrawn.
No sense, no truth, no arms to hold on.
On a mission of mercy up over.
The newest light is mounting
up to correct the marks
left for another.



Try that.
[n/a] daniella › horus8 30-Mar-03/9:48 PM Reply
i did, look it took me somewhere indeed.