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Ash Wednesday (Free verse) by Dreamer
No one will cry No one will care They'll see her fly Screaming Life's not fair Too many tests Too many lies They know best Its easier to die It wasn't far from the window to the concrete It wasn't far from the ground to the door They would mock such a feat Ripping out her heart's core Yet some people cried Yet some people cared Why she said bye They just couldn't bear For when she took her life On that cold Wednesday, she lashed She took more than one life Their days are now nothing but ashes.

Up the ladder: How does it feel?
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.68
Weighted score: 4.682142
Overall Rank: 12103
Posted: March 6, 2003 2:47 PM PST; Last modified: March 6, 2003 2:47 PM PST
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Comments:
[7] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 | 17-Aug-03/1:57 PM | Reply
has a sonorous ring to it...a bit familiar in some way. not to shabby, 7
[4] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 17-Aug-03/2:10 PM | Reply
Did she land fetus first? God, I hope so.
[5] Sasha @ 69.138.236.63 | 15-May-04/12:50 PM | Reply
I think I'll go cry now.

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