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We the destroyers (Free verse) by Crakyamuni
they say Satiation in creation comes from production through destruction Some say "they be ill"- or is it purity through divine will? Will you testify when the bloodletting commences or merely hide behind your picket fences.. free Of any real passion or love us we will bring down heaven in the form of a dove

Up the ladder: The Flight of Childhood
Down the ladder: Give Me A Chance

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.7615943
Overall Rank: 11633
Posted: March 3, 2003 6:07 PM PST; Last modified: March 3, 2003 6:07 PM PST
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[n/a] god'swife @ 67.73.32.155 | 18-Sep-03/10:15 AM | Reply
The last line is solid but the rest is so contrived. The fourth line is complete nonsense, and if your talking about The Judgement in the sixth line then no one can hide, not from that. Also the word 'free' implies freedom which is a good thing. It be better to use a word like void, or vacant, or without etc...
Also the title makes no sense whatsoever. The church is not the destroyer. The lamb is, or in this case the dove.
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