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(untitled) (Other) by Ray This feeling inside me it makes me
so sad
so mad
It makes cry
makes me want to die
It hurts but I have to get through it.
So I just sit
and wait.
I love him so much I just cry and cry.
I look into the sky and wonder why.
Why must i feel this way?
This feeling inside me makes me
so sad
so mad...
Up the ladder:
THE WHEELCHAIR
Down the ladder:
17
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.2
Posted: February 24, 2003 1:07 PM PST; Last modified: February 24, 2003 1:11 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.7854347 Overall Rank: 11302 Comments:
so....dare I say...bad?
Hmm i give.........a 7 , hey 7 aint bad ya know!?
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Nice use of form, a bit heavy on the assonance--beware of sounding too sing-songy. 6.