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My Poor Heart (Free verse) by NewbieMe How many times must you love someone not worthy?
How many times must you suffer and bleed?
How many times must you sacrifice yourself for someone?
How many times must you endure this?
What is it with you and pain?
What is it with you and hurt?
What is it with you and longing?
What is it with you and hope?
Why must you ignore the signs
Why must you look past the truth
Why must you tolerate the pain?
Why must you keep going on?
When will you accept all this?
When will you stop and think?
When will you think and act?
When will you learn from this?
Up the ladder:
ode to bad taco meat
Down the ladder:
cornbread
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Arithmetic Mean: 1.3333334
Posted: February 21, 2003 7:23 AM PST; Last modified: February 21, 2003 7:23 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.0138817 Overall Rank: 13364 Comments:
Dull kiddo. Try a whole new aproach to your writing style. You need some depth.
oh thanks, i do believe i really need depth. this is one of those impulse writing, just writing not thinking much. :)
Hey don't worry about it. Just giving you some insight for next time.Trust me we all start out sucky but the goal is to get better. ;)
oh, that's nice of you to say. i went to look at one of ur poems, you got a lot of angst against yer ex-gf but i kinda understand why. very vivid tho the way you express LoL. will read more of your poems when i'm free. on another note, care to read my other poems? i promise i won't get mad w/ ur criticism. good or bad comments are appreciated ;)
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I suck too