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Lindsey's Ballad (Lyric) by thepinkbunnyofdoom I know why
The cage bird sings
Its because
She still has her wings
One day your going to make a mistake
And shes gonna go for break
Shes headed out your front door
And you won't see her no more
I know why
the damsel in distress
Always
Wears her best dress
Its because
Shes waiting for that day
When prince charming will come
And sweep her away
I know why
Lindsey still lives on
Its because
Her dreams still live on
See that light in her eyes
That light is hope
Without it she'd die
Up the ladder:
Self-Help
Down the ladder:
Butterfield, Minn. Tommy's farm 1993
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Posted: February 10, 2003 6:09 PM PST; Last modified: February 10, 2003 6:09 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.7232094 Overall Rank: 478 Comments:
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razorgrin @ 192.197.143.118
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11-Feb-03/9:54 AM
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There's a lot of cliche in the language ("caged bird")bit, but if you polished it a little, it could be good.
Hi bunny. I know we haven't always seen eye to eye, but I'm confident that if you provide a full and frank apology, we can forget about this rather unpleasant business. Friends?
The lines, "That light is hope Without it she'd die" are beautiful, by the way. 280 view(s)
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