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love (Free verse) by flatliner If you have to say it
does it make it more true
i hope for my sake, not
since i feel it all the time
and while it scares me still
being with you it defines.
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Posted: July 10, 2002 8:47 AM PDT; Last modified: July 10, 2002 8:47 AM PDTWeighted score: 3.75 Overall Rank: 13517 Comments:
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deleted user @ 67.40.59.100
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21-Aug-02/8:16 AM
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It is hard for a reader to take in a poem that has such a broad, almost overwhelming title. You lose half your audience from people going, "Oh, god, another poem called 'Love'." Maybe you should reevaluate your intentions and try to show the reader what you are thinking rather than simply making a statement that could easily be said by anyone.
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