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Untitled (Free verse) by Carvaceous
She steps out A winding wind sneaks through the closing door I watch through the wavering glass she slips from her pocket a light for the dry cig, sitting ever so precariously yet balanced I watch Smoke spiral up from her unsmiling mouth He steps up besides her and lights less precariously Smoke curls from his lips slipping past dead skin hanging I watch Smoke lit by neon dissipate into the dark I watch He presses his mouth to hers She crushes her cig underfoot stepping back in She brings with her a shivering chill The smell of stale smoke offered to the night I cringe

Up the ladder: That feeling
Down the ladder: Best i Ever Had

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Weighted score: 5.0476813
Overall Rank: 6846
Posted: January 13, 2003 1:15 PM PST; Last modified: January 13, 2003 1:15 PM PST
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[8] Lucifer @ 68.48.88.129 | 13-Jan-03/1:38 PM | Reply
I would too....Hye look I'd kind of like to explain and apologize for sunday morning...
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 13-Jan-03/2:37 PM | Reply
lose the "i cringe", so that we can. get it? otherwise, loveley
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