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Untitled (Free verse) by Carvaceous
She steps out
A winding wind sneaks through the closing door
I watch
through the wavering glass
she slips from her pocket a light
for the dry cig, sitting ever so precariously
yet balanced
I watch
Smoke spiral up from her unsmiling mouth
He steps up besides her and lights less precariously
Smoke curls from his lips
slipping past dead skin
hanging
I watch
Smoke lit by neon dissipate into the dark
I watch
He presses his mouth to hers
She crushes her cig underfoot
stepping back in
She brings with her a shivering chill
The smell of stale smoke
offered to the night
I cringe
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Weighted score: 5.0476813
Overall Rank: 6846
Posted: January 13, 2003 1:15 PM PST; Last modified: January 13, 2003 1:15 PM PST
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