my journey--or the beginning of...

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Jan 2003 · 4 comments

as i walk through the forest trees bend in and whisper "where are you going little girl---turn back, this way is not for you." the freedom of the leaves is oppressing. scattered along my invisible path rocks hurl words "listen to your elders, the ancient trees. young fawn, they know better than you." i walk on careful not to step on them with the cool breeze smothering me. if i heeded my elders i would not be in this world. "you cannot do it you cannot do it" i can. and will. you just watch. head held high, i shut out the wind--if only i could silence the little voice deep inside. "turn back, i'm afraid of the dark"

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[5] bondjedi 4-Jan-03/8:29 PM Reply

a Nike commercial meets The Hobbit

[7] suzanna 5-Jan-03/3:02 AM Reply

good poem.
its almost like something that i would write.
there's a good twist to this

[10] rockinindividual 5-Jan-03/8:20 AM Reply

i told you i loved this poem. its you, its totally you...and the ending is wonderful...10

[8] debased 9-Jan-03/1:47 PM Reply

i really liked this peice
why dont u have ne thing else posted?
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