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From the Ashes of Descartes (Free verse) by Quarton
I omce viewed the world in comfort with my realities though, I can no longer take refuge in them knowing there remains no sustainable thesis, no gospel I may safely build on; my initial premise fatally flawed. My crumbling foundation unable to support beliefs once perceived as truth, burdened by prior notions of a universe out there, existing in seclusion; now undone by the world of quantum. A fantasy-like state emerging from the ashes of Descartes who thought he was and from his Cartesian view; therefore was. Though between mirage and reality-- like the desert traveler with cupped hands yielding only undrinkable sand-- lies the illusion of the magicians sleight of hand; things not always as they seem. While the quark and lepton dance hand in hand to the cosmic beat of uncertainty. Commomsense contradictions the rule, world transformed--fresh realities born as I gaze skyward, now able to see-- the moon and the stars are a part of me.

Up the ladder: Waiting

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6
Weighted score: 4.9523187
Overall Rank: 8923
Posted: January 4, 2003 5:45 PM PST; Last modified: January 4, 2003 5:45 PM PST
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[4] bondjedi @ 216.163.73.66 | 4-Jan-03/8:32 PM | Reply
more like from the ass of descartes
[n/a] Quarton @ 12.217.212.111 > bondjedi | 5-Jan-03/5:46 AM | Reply
Judging by the brilliance of your reply, I
doubt you even know who he is or what is
meant by Cartesian reality. Not my fault and
perhaps you should go back to reading what
you can understand, like nursery rhymes.
[4] bondjedi @ 12.228.21.93 > Quarton | 8-Apr-03/1:19 PM | Reply
You're right: it's not your fault. Alas, I still don't care much for your poem..
[10] vulcan @ 80.242.3.51 | 7-Jan-03/2:52 AM | Reply
Marvelous!very nice!a poem with a real content and proper words to influence!really enjoyed!the 3rd stanza is a wonder!(Really!)10
[n/a] Quarton @ 12.217.212.111 > vulcan | 7-Jan-03/6:15 PM | Reply
Thank you vulcan. Your approval is much appreciated.
The world of quantum is indeed strange and difficult
to describe though I continue to try. Too bad more
is not written on the subject as it goes to the heart
of our existence and how we perceive the world we live in.
[9] ecargo @ 64.252.77.151 | 10-Jan-03/1:03 PM | Reply
This is really good. I agree with Vulcan re: the third stanza--it really is the best--the images are great. Could you somehow sustain the imagery throughout? S2--"crumbling foundation" really is a cliche--might want to work something else in there.
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