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the surrender (Free verse) by brazen
baskets full of foreign fruits so sweet they rot your mouth spilling teeth in floods of lies rotting, seething Holy ground you once walked upon its strength now be subdued by trenches of mud sink below and let it fill your lungs feel the backlash of your evil tongue. you spent your time pulling zeros and ended by adding up to nothing now your but a mark in a black book at least thats made you good for something. harmonized in chastity out of key with lost virginity. recalling the eyes that brought my surrender.

Up the ladder: Marching Orders
Down the ladder: lost

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.865529
Overall Rank: 10341
Posted: December 24, 2002 9:56 PM PST; Last modified: December 24, 2002 9:56 PM PST
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[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Dec-02/11:36 PM | Reply
you went to her web site too huh? yeah, that ornella she's a something.
[n/a] brazen @ 65.237.112.78 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 25-Dec-02/9:36 PM | Reply
no...but i did now.
[6] wOrnella Mutiw @ 198.81.26.167 | 25-Dec-02/12:34 AM | Reply
If this is for me...thank you...I enjoyed it...maybe I'll let you taste me but then you'll get tooth decay..ayyyyy...here's some Mentadent.
[n/a] brazen @ 65.237.112.78 > wOrnella Mutiw | 25-Dec-02/9:39 PM | Reply
thank you. then again, maybe you should let me have a taste, since mullets from the front side usually have that feature stereotyped to them. if only i wasn't so fucking lazy all the time and actually spent more time looking at people's web sites i'd have known about mulletjunkie.com so much sooner. one of my favorite vacation hobbies is photographing mullets. i have a couple great ones from the last time i went to disney world. i'll let you know when i find them.
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