poemranker ::Entrapment by MakenzieNy

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Free verse № 28753

Entrapment

Member since 2002 · Posted 5 Dec 2002 · 2 comments

When i first fell in love with you you were my everything i used to think we could concer all then longer we're together the more outta love i fall you make me feel like a child your only pushing me away i want to be free to dream not be worried about what you think all i have ever wanted is to be loved by you not controled you see i can't do this no more i used to love and believe in us as a whole when everyone else doubted us we proved them wrong now i see that i never really loved you you became a rush ,a quick high for me everyone wanted me to stay away you became an addiction,forbidden as it may seem as the days go by i resent you more and more i hate you,i loath you i hate the fact that you act like my puppeteer all things must come to an end i'm so tired and lonely,i need more you have made me feel worthless,for too long the day has come,for me to break these strings i deserve to be happy like i used to be,and if that means going on with out you then that's the way it will be

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[5] Caducus 6-Dec-02/8:46 AM Reply
A little futile and one dimensional, nice, but basically very formulaic.*5*
[5] Caducus 6-Dec-02/8:46 AM Reply
check line 3 for spelling (conquer)