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The Wife and the Spider (Free verse) by Caducus
From your lips to mine you weaved silk in cotton and a spider crawled on akimbo shadows. You screamed my name yet thought of his, your web caught me and I watched you dine on my insides from my teardrop on silk. Every lie was a strand perfectly formed; usually at weekends when guilt forced your lips on the back of my neck by the digital flicker where minutes crept, And tears fell like forgotten heroes. I thought of his drooling jaw curdling the breasts that fed our son. My wife once sang beautifully to him of mockingbirds she’d bring but she brought him a spider and a stepdad who left when the web was finsihed.

Up the ladder: Train
Down the ladder: Loves colonialism

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7717
Posted: November 29, 2002 3:49 AM PST; Last modified: May 17, 2006 7:14 AM PDT
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[10] Niphredil @ 132.69.238.35 | 18-May-06/10:18 AM | Reply
This is most excellent. You hold the spider metaphor intact throughout the entire poem without either forgetting or abusing it. And you do it so beautifully! Both the execution and concept are terrific. -10-.

p.s. I think "weaved" in the second line should be "wove".
[n/a] Caducus @ 86.141.200.125 > Niphredil | 19-May-06/5:26 AM | Reply
Thank you.
[10] ALChemy @ 71.75.176.68 | 20-May-06/3:41 AM | Reply
I don't know why she swallowed the spider
that wiggled and jiggled and giggled inside her.
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