poemranker ::The Last Battle by seebergerb

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Free verse № 2444

The Last Battle

Member since 2002 · Posted 26 May 2002 · 3 comments

The inspiration I found in the heart of where inspiration is supposed to be, fled into the horizon where nothing lives. Even the wind, my muse of ordinary contraption, fled for warmer islands. My trees color black and crumble to ash. The stench is unbearable, like a crowd of angry fans who now feel betrayed, hated, and left alone. The waves that used to sing only mutter monotonous chants now, like old monks lost in the maze of their cloisture.

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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-May-02/11:50 AM Reply
What's a 'cloisture'? Good use of the word 'like'! Sometimes metaphor can be too strong, can't it?
[n/a] seebergerb 26-May-02/6:06 PM Reply
Heh... cloistre is supposed to be cloister. Oh well.

Thanks for the feedback. And yes, I agree.
[7] FreeFormFixation 9-Oct-03/9:52 PM Reply
i love similes. this is a great story as well as a poem, and the loss conveyed within it is very moving.