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The Last Battle (Free verse) by seebergerb
The inspiration I found in the heart of where inspiration is supposed to be, fled into the horizon where nothing lives. Even the wind, my muse of ordinary contraption, fled for warmer islands. My trees color black and crumble to ash. The stench is unbearable, like a crowd of angry fans who now feel betrayed, hated, and left alone. The waves that used to sing only mutter monotonous chants now, like old monks lost in the maze of their cloisture.

Down the ladder: Sleep of Death

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.1
Weighted score: 4.05
Overall Rank: 13339
Posted: May 26, 2002 10:01 AM PDT; Last modified: May 26, 2002 10:01 AM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 194.82.103.44 | 26-May-02/11:50 AM | Reply
What's a 'cloisture'? Good use of the word 'like'! Sometimes metaphor can be too strong, can't it?
[n/a] seebergerb @ | 26-May-02/6:06 PM | Reply
Heh... cloistre is supposed to be cloister. Oh well.

Thanks for the feedback. And yes, I agree.
[7] FreeFormFixation @ 216.125.247.11 | 9-Oct-03/9:52 PM | Reply
i love similes. this is a great story as well as a poem, and the loss conveyed within it is very moving.
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