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Ghostdancing (Free verse) by ifni in turning,
I am turned by you;
in changing,
I am shaped by you;
when seeing,
I am seen by you;
when dancing,
I dance by you,
and
through you,
and into you-
when dancing is the shape of things-to-
come
and I am blind without the music,
will you still take me by the
hand,
shape me by intent,
free me to dance upon the winds?
I am
faceless without you-
ghost-dancing.
6-13-99 JV
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:17 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.267822 Overall Rank: 3947 Comments:
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16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
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Ghost dance makes me think of American Indians, and I think a spiritual movement that was supposed to drive the European settlers out. Interesting that the structure between the 2 stanzas is different. Not sure this works for me, but at least it doesn't appear haphazard. Like the 2nd stanza better than the first.
Good imagery, very evocative-"ghost-dancing"
Beautiful, raw.
kind of vague.
I like it a lot.
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