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Hated (Free verse) by Ninoy_Instigator
I can't believe it It has finally happened I am down in her mind I am an eyesore of a thought Did I do something wrong Did I do something rude Did I lose her respect Did I become boring Hatred is something Hard to spot Hatred is stronger, the Harder it is to spot They crucified Christ They assassinated Malcolm They executed Rizal They snuck a bullet into King Feelings dwell inside Feelings of hate get more discrete if the Feelings are really hateful. These are the Feelings that are dark and ugly indeed. Take what you want from this, and Take criticism wisely, I will Take your criticism, I can handle that Hate, but I can't Take it, having her hate me.

Up the ladder: Always there
Down the ladder: For you my dear.

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.1666667
Weighted score: 4.2379994
Overall Rank: 13193
Posted: October 23, 2002 8:31 PM PDT; Last modified: October 23, 2002 8:31 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 | 24-Oct-02/9:38 AM | Reply
believe me, you'll get over it.
[0] Tintagiles @ 198.164.238.3 | 24-Oct-02/11:57 AM | Reply
You did do something boring. This poem. Don't you think comparing yourself to Christ, Malcolm, Rizal and King is a bit pretentious? Though I'm glad you kept Lincoln, Kennedy, and Rabin out of the list. Though you might have added Lumumba and Gandhi.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 | 24-Oct-02/12:55 PM | Reply
The line "they snuck a bullet into King" is good. I do not care for the rest.
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