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Hero Within a Mother (Free verse) by confuzdlilgirl
She brought me into this earth I came and then I noticed how much she reigned if I'm confused beyond my site I'll go to her to make it right A boy has come and ripped my heart in two she isn't always there to coddle, but knows just what to do If a gap appears between a friend of mine she tells me not to worry and just give it time If I come to a time where I don't know where to turn She comes to tell me its only a lesson I am to learn Not to worry for I'm fine just how I conceive I can get what I want if I only just believe Sometimes she does things I just don't understand Like keep me from going out or doing what I can She doesn't try to shelter me from society's ways instead she teaches me to look beyond the haze Though I can see bad, to always look for the good To always say "I will" and never "I could" I hear of her childhood and her times with guys I know I resemble her when I express through my eyes She is the one that has taught me everyone's ways It is she that I know will be there through out my days When I walk down the aisle and look at her tear I'll know even though I'm grown, she will always be near When I trade places and become the mother I know she will help me teach and raise my daughter The way she has with me, I will do so the same I will show her everything and the rules of the game She is the guardian of my life My protector from the strife My teacher of things in school I won't see My Hero...in which I hope to be.

Up the ladder: Irony
Down the ladder: I Cry

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.25
Weighted score: 4.798294
Overall Rank: 11197
Posted: October 14, 2002 6:48 PM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2002 6:48 PM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 216.61.132.107 | 14-Oct-02/6:55 PM | Reply
Beautiful. Your poems are always such a refreshing contrast to the more popular morbid tones of most poets. Perhaps try to keep a steady beat going throughout the entire poem. You're a great writer!
[8] blackball @ 207.179.180.57 | 25-Nov-02/12:21 AM | Reply
that's great...really good actually.
[n/a] deleted user @ 212.219.142.161 | 25-Nov-02/12:51 AM | Reply
oh god please tell me this isnt a poem devoted to your mother? see my poem what mother and farther taught. (dont mention the spelling a pretentious twat has already done that)
[n/a] confuzdlilgirl @ 64.218.202.19 > deleted user | 25-Nov-02/8:02 AM | Reply
it is one about my mom, was it not obvoius enough?
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