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Laughter (Free verse) by crims0ngh0st Bound by your honor,
Taken by your privilege.
Your pleasures are mine to
accomplish-
My goal is only to please.
My body lays in wait
Yours
forever more.
You fondle my mind from the inside;
Depravity is my friend.
Your slightest command invokes my full attention.
I am devoted to your
every whim.
Passion envelops me-
Oozes from my every pore.
As I bask in
the shadow of your power,
Your decadence is enviable.
Indulge yourself
with me.
My everything yours alone.
Up the ladder:
Full another terrific love ballad by John K.Y.
Down the ladder:
tunnel boy
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Posted: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PSTWeighted score: 3.7887168 Overall Rank: 13499 Comments:
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8-Apr-02/8:14 AM
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there must be a better way to say "you fondle my mind from the inside" and "oozes from my every pore" is not only slightly gross, but also v. cliche. You discovered an interesting comparison to what laughter means to you, now just lose the trite language - or all you originality goes bust.
Who let Oprah in
i bet i can find you on that bdsm site - maybe you should keep this between you and your keeper.
bet i can find you on that bdsm site... maybe you should keep this between you and you slave driver... because as poetry, this reeks.
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