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a piece of me (Free verse) by Freethinker1602
I'm finding out how lonely the early morning hours really are it may have been one day it may have been one week could have been a month but I'm finding out how much missing you hurts I don't know if I'll miss you just as much tomorrow because missing you this much today is agony I don't know how much I could stand Don't think I could miss you more than I do now It has only been one day and my heart strings sing out, like a guitar string strummed I just learned how lonely alone really is it's an empty feeling A feeling of wanting, endless waiting a feeling of emptiness I can't imagine a life with out you if I didn't see you for one week I would go insane from the pain So solitary these small hours of the morning are I'm holding on to the thought of you if I close my eyes and wish hard enough I can smell you and feel your warm touch I doubt, after one month I would be the same I would lose myself' because I'd miss you too much

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.0
Weighted score: 4.8577223
Overall Rank: 10416
Posted: February 16, 2010 9:28 PM PST; Last modified: February 16, 2010 9:28 PM PST
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[2] jh99 @ 75.220.45.254 | 28-Feb-10/12:47 AM | Reply
I'm finding out how clichéd this writing is. If you want this thing to be better, come up with more original thinking. This sounds like every POP song I hate.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 69.171.176.17 > jh99 | 7-Aug-10/4:44 PM | Reply
I'm sure it would please you to know I am writing a pop/ emo album.
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