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ALIVE (Free verse) by adrenalize
Feels the fear overpower him The desperation that brings a man to his knees Trying not to feel the pain That kills him a million times over This cant be happening to me he thinks What have I done to deserve this The shape shifter of an emotion That has gotten a hold of him Like a soldier of a doomed army The drowning man who clutches at the straw Praying and crying for Divine Intervention His faith being his sole possession Like a thunderbolt his salvation comes Awe struck by the blind man who walks by smiling And asks him What???s the weather like young man Is the sun shining in all its majesty today? With his entire body frozen he somehow manages to reach out to the man As he helps him across the road He envies the contentment and serenity on his face Until he finally realizes it And like a born again man He approaches the trash can and throws the gun inside Manages a smile as he thinks to himself ???Today is a good day to be alive??? Adrenalize

Up the ladder: You Win
Down the ladder: breathtaking

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.5
Weighted score: 4.3276463
Overall Rank: 13093
Posted: September 17, 2002 10:02 AM PDT; Last modified: September 17, 2002 10:02 AM PDT
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[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.185 | 24-Sep-02/8:08 PM | Reply
How is it that, a man in this case, can face pain that kills him a million billion times? You manage to spend a good deal of time here making little sense, but hey, that's cool.
[n/a] adrenalize @ 202.141.238.2 > poetandknowit | 25-Sep-02/9:22 AM | Reply
Well first of all thank you for taking the time to comment but i can't make any sense of it because i never thought poetry was about making sense.But thats just my opinion.........every1's entitled to their's.........
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