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Six deaths

Member since 2002 · Posted 19 Jan 2008 · 1 comment

Long hair on a coarse towel survived five thousand revolutions plucked from a stranger in glass who placed it in your jewelry box. Next doors lovemaking. Sighs that were gifts wrapped in breath, now just a remnant in waxed whorls from the taper she blew out. Tones of voices who knew you that now want to know me keep-sake vultures with clichés Simon Elvin cards with chain shop sympathies. Night and Narnia lampposts visits to your wardrobe doors clothes where your limbs left a scent that hang in polythene to trap it. Turning left as I wake the five second husband birth till realization kills him and a stranger is born into hell. The sixth death is the strangers It will be real and beautiful consignment to a promise - half fulfilled.

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[10] deleted user 5-Feb-08/7:36 PM Reply
This is a fabulous poem. The language is impecable and each stanza has been beautifuly crafted to carry its own weight. Well done.