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My circlet of reveries

Member since 2007 · Posted 28 Nov 2007 · 2 comments

Midst the dusty pile in cobweb sheath Was lying a treasured wreath Rays from the attic window kindled sporadic shimmer Reminiscent of its once glory and glimmer Circlet embellished in splendid pearls and amethyst Lovely would have been the hand that wrought it Dusting it with my handkerchief I wondered Whoâs head would have this once adorned? Did this hold a story or allegoryâ¦? Or did it conceal a tale of gloryâ¦ Of a love sought, fought or lost Or of power, clout or larceny in spite Or did it simply hold the story of a bride Who walked down the aisle in pride? Whatever the tale behind this diadem Wrought in love was each one of its gem Adorning it took me to a fantasy land of sheen and glimmer Till I watched my reflection in the attic mirror Alas I realized I canât coddle in these pleasures For am just a maid dusting my masterâs antique treasures

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[7] Dark Angle 3-Dec-07/11:56 AM Reply

No this one is good. And I hope I don't dissuade your writing with my (harsh?) comments, I'm no professional poem ranker or anything, I'm just here to have some fun. But with this one, while the imagery is good and it tells a story vividly the rhymes/words seem kind of forced and the style seems kind of dated. You should read a lot of new stuff, maybe you'll see. Of course, I'm not really one to talk about reading others poetry, I barely have time to read my own.

[6] Jessina 9-Dec-07/9:26 PM Reply

Dear Lees,

A wonderful piece of sublime feelings with good rhyming.

A good attempt .Keep romancing with your pen.