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Feel Like A Failure (Free verse) by polaroidmemory
These metallic chains that hold me back Are becoming more resistant everytime I move. And the intelligence that I lack Makes me feel like a failure. This illustrious fantasy that dwells in my mind Is becoming more elaborate everyday. And this unseen, invulnerable wall I hide behind Makes me feel like a failure. I see your vigilant eyes inquiring in the dark. They lurk behind me wherever I journey. Your eyes are like fire and they cast off a spark. They make me feel like a failure.

Up the ladder: time (3rd draft)
Down the ladder: Remembering Nick

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.976287
Overall Rank: 8279
Posted: December 18, 2006 6:08 PM PST; Last modified: December 18, 2006 6:08 PM PST
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