fairy tale

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Sep 2002 · Edited 13 Sep 2002 · 4 comments

Fairy tale whimsical Dance on the breeze Palace sparkles Across the seas Dance for me now With elegance great Show me the path Of mythical fate Wind blow through The glitter and gold Close my eyes As the dream unfolds Play me your music Invisible grace Come to me adorers With satin and lace Whimsical, whimsical Fading away Touch me again In your fairy tale gay

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4 comments

[3] poetandknowit 12-Sep-02/8:34 PM Reply

Why the one comma? You didn't bother to use punctuation anywhere else. And the last line is clumsy with the typo. Might want to get that.

[5] royalflesh 12-Sep-02/8:59 PM Reply

touch me! Your getting hot! and making me sweat. ever read the magician's heart. its hard to find.

[7] Katie 13-Sep-02/8:39 AM Reply

It could use a little work, the idea is nice, but the structer could use some work. 7/10 =)

[n/a] pete 13-Sep-02/2:13 PM Reply

poetry by numbers .... should in be with in last line ? or are you in someone elses story