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fairy tale (Free verse) by jlanza

Fairy tale whimsical Dance on the breeze Palace sparkles Across the seas Dance for me now With elegance great Show me the path Of mythical fate Wind blow through The glitter and gold Close my eyes As the dream unfolds Play me your music Invisible grace Come to me adorers With satin and lace Whimsical, whimsical Fading away Touch me again In your fairy tale gay

Katie 13-Sep-02/8:39 AM
It could use a little work, the idea is nice, but the structer could use some work. 7/10 =)




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