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Love is just a word (Free verse) by trev086
Love is a word that doesn???t belong. Is it simple, meaningful, or just there to tag along? Love is a word that means way to much People misuse, the hearts are crushed. If you love wait for the day Which your heart will know when to say Love is a word that doesn???t belong It plays games in your head which can create a song. Pieces floating around like stars in the sky The use of the word will be a sparkle in your eye The one true feeling is the sensation of the heart So use it wisely and then you will never part. ~Trevor Greene

Down the ladder: #10

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.181818
Weighted score: 4.590909
Overall Rank: 12569
Posted: September 12, 2002 4:19 AM PDT; Last modified: September 12, 2002 4:19 AM PDT
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[1] god'swife @ 209.179.213.91 | 12-Sep-02/9:30 AM | Reply
Love is a verb. The act of loving someone is far more noble and necessary than the sensation. Other than that, this poem is awkward at best. The rhymns are childish.
[8] royalflesh @ 64.170.52.79 | 12-Sep-02/9:03 PM | Reply
Know exactly how you feel. Like this one much better. Good job. Great work! 8
[2] emman @ 213.204.138.26 | 21-Sep-02/9:18 PM | Reply
hmm...the meaning of it is good...but I don't like it very much in whole...sorry...
[5] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 17-Dec-02/11:16 AM | Reply
love is definitely a word used too much. especially for poems.

I'd recommend trying to work on the rhythm of this piece so that it flows more naturally. (try reading it outloud and see where you stumble... count syllables and compare stress if you're really bored...)

beyond that, eh.
[5] RGallet @ 140.186.49.215 | 7-Jan-03/7:54 PM | Reply
I like the idea but it's terribly stated.
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