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Are life after death (Free verse) by freakything
A everlasting point in life where everything seems to stand still. One might start to wonder what is real.................................. ............. ........................................................................ ..... 'When the time comes, and once again you see my face 'then you will know you are with me, in a better place.' 'Where always is endless,' 'Where forever is eternity.' 'Where a good heart finds its final destiny.' ' Here, death can no longer keep us apart.' ' But, until we meet again, remember me with every beat of your heart.' 'And as hard as it may seem, let go of the pain.' ' the sun needs to shine, Don't get lost in the rain.' ' Be strong be brave, keep your head high.' ' And when you need me, reach toward the sky.' ' Just because you can not see me, dose not mean I'm not there.' ' And I hope you do believe that no matter what i will always care.' ' So, just like on earth, I will be watching over you.' ' That is what true love drives us to do.' ' And, just because my time on earth is gone ,' ' Dose not mean you should give up and not move on.' ' It is easier to dwell and not forgive.' ' And harder to to be a better person,' ' And let go and live.' ' you will only find confusion if you question life and the reasons why. ' ' Just as you can not keep a angel from its time to fly.' 'So, I will meet you when its your time to come heavens way.' ' Goodbye's are just words I will never say.'

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Weighted score: 4.8013287
Overall Rank: 11107
Posted: May 12, 2006 2:35 AM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2006 2:35 AM PDT
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[6] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 12-May-06/5:20 AM | Reply
'Our life after death', unless you're attempting a pun there, which even if you are is pretty tortured grammatically.

Be more inventive with your rhymes. If you look through any amount of poetry on the internet you will find every single rhyme in here used approximately a million times. Doing what's been done that much before is an instant turn-off for the reader. Check a rhyming dictionary if you're struggling for ideas.

General tip for anyone posting 4 poems in one go: leave some comments on other peoples' works, or you'll find very few people commenting on yours.
[6] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 > Ranger | 12-May-06/5:24 AM | Reply
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