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Are life after death (Free verse) by freakything
A everlasting point in life where everything seems to stand still.
One might start to wonder what is real..................................
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'When the time comes, and once again you see my face
'then you will know you are with me, in a better place.'
'Where always is endless,'
'Where forever is eternity.'
'Where a good heart finds its final destiny.'
' Here, death can no longer keep us apart.'
' But, until we meet again, remember me with every beat of your heart.'
'And as hard as it may seem, let go of the pain.'
' the sun needs to shine, Don't get lost in the rain.'
' Be strong be brave, keep your head high.'
' And when you need me, reach toward the sky.'
' Just because you can not see me, dose not mean I'm not there.'
' And I hope you do believe that no matter what i will always care.'
' So, just like on earth, I will be watching over you.'
' That is what true love drives us to do.'
' And, just because my time on earth is gone ,'
' Dose not mean you should give up and not move on.'
' It is easier to dwell and not forgive.'
' And harder to to be a better person,'
' And let go and live.'
' you will only find confusion if you question life and the reasons why.
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' Just as you can not keep a angel from its time to fly.'
'So, I will meet you when its your time to come heavens way.'
' Goodbye's are just words I will never say.'
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Posted: May 12, 2006 2:35 AM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2006 2:35 AM PDT
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Be more inventive with your rhymes. If you look through any amount of poetry on the internet you will find every single rhyme in here used approximately a million times. Doing what's been done that much before is an instant turn-off for the reader. Check a rhyming dictionary if you're struggling for ideas.
General tip for anyone posting 4 poems in one go: leave some comments on other peoples' works, or you'll find very few people commenting on yours.