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A child's father (Free verse) by rahson_s
I walked miles
for acceptance,
the hunger motivated
me to want, I tried
to do better in school,
But following that
Royal Blue gang
around didn't help
my cause, I paused,
fell back and allowed
myself to breathe,
underneath all the
violence lives a man
in desperate need
of change, hand picked
by Satan to rule
these streets,
a mission most men
find hard to complete,
I mean I'm thirty-three
and I've been in and out
of prison all my days,
I've never once questioned
my faith, my religious
beliefs, my understanding
of the good book,
until one day she
appeared with this
little kid, saying things
like I'm a father and
this is my son, on that
day I knew what I was
put here to do,
everyday since
I've been the first
and last person
that child has seen before
he falls asleep and
awakes for his new day, I am
somebody if anything,
I am
a child's father
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Posted: April 2, 2006 10:25 PM PDT; Last modified: April 2, 2006 10:25 PM PDT
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Good content, it feels a little too informal in places (I mean, I'm thirty-three', 'never once') but they aren't hugely important criticisms - just how I read it.