Flower of Life

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Feb 2006 · Edited 27 Feb 2006 · 4 comments

You were a flower in bloom Brightly coloured in generosity and honesty. Surrounded by a large circle of family and friends Always smiling and laughing Eager to help Your home a place of refuge. You held the calmness of a still ocean And the warmth of a summer breeze Surrounding all with your kindness. A kindness rewarded with love from all that knew you Generous to a fault you gave with no thought of receipt. Yet now you shall be remembered thus As a flower forever in bloom

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[n/a] longships 27-Feb-06/4:10 PM Reply

In memory of my grandmother

[6] Dovina 27-Feb-06/4:39 PM Reply

I suggest cutting half the words, which I think will make it twice as strong.

Sample:
Calm as a still ocean
Warm as a summer breeze

[7] Ranger › Dovina 1-Mar-06/9:56 AM Reply

I'm not convinced that would work in a poem written purposefully to someone.
I quite like it as it is.

[7] Ranger › Ranger 1-Mar-06/9:58 AM Reply

longships, you have lots of poems posted on here, yet you haven't voted or commented on anyone else's work! What's going on?!?