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Free verse № 1361

Pi

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 May 2002 · 2 comments

He smiles tightly. There is a vapour in the air which scares him. It permeates his orifices, making him both nervous and aroused. Reaching out, his hand strokes across the back of the model Buddha, his fingertips following a fault in the wood. A woman with magenta hair approaches him. Her eyes look past him in a glazed indifference. ?Interested?? There is little thought behind the words. This is the hundredth time she?d asked it today. ?Lost my religion ...? he says, remembering his music injury. He hands her the list. ?Recognise any?? Her eyes show a slight interest in the paper She?s failed a papyrus course at University. This seems quite ancient. The words mean little. ?Not in this life ...? Her voice is shallow, without feeling. ?Thanks.? He says leaving the shop, taking a final lung of jostic.

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[3] anonymous 16-May-02/1:24 PM Reply
okay... i was going to post the definition of "jostic" after I looked it up on m-w.com ... but according to webster, the word doesn't exist. Too bad the oed is such a snob. ..... otherwise, there is something about this I'm not sure I completely hate... so you get a 4.
[5] nentwined 10-Aug-02/12:32 PM Reply
hm.. I want a little more out of this story (story; I don't see any poem about this other than the linebreaks every couple of words).