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As we lay (Free verse) by rahson_s
Its morning, as we lay A man's wife sits in worry, Her hubby, dipping In other women, The finest flock Of dimes, sharing Time with each race, Their faces differ in shade Yet sex drives remain In neutral, truly ruling out charm as an influence, explosive sex, proven signs of fulfillment, hospitalized for guilty pleasures entertained in the night, for my mother's sake I protect sickness from family, sexual fantasies defines me, as we lay

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7833
Posted: December 28, 2005 8:40 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2005 8:40 AM PST
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[5] Dovina @ 209.247.222.94 | 28-Dec-05/2:13 PM | Reply
It's like you wrote this quickly and sloppily - inconsistent capitals, unclear references, missing periods.
[n/a] rahson_s @ 69.201.135.219 | 3-Jan-06/4:10 PM | Reply
Thanks.. It's all in a days work.. Quick and sloppy.. just like it's suppose to be..

thanks again..

Ro-

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