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Virgin (Free verse) by MacFrantic
Loneliness That calls me back As I wonder what love is like How can I write of two When I know but one in this Loneliness? The touch Wanting more in nothing Than I ever wanted in everything And hearing the atmosphere Pulse with emotion To write this Is to lie Is to wither within And I am sick of it all

Down the ladder: Castle of Pandas IV

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.029801
Overall Rank: 7338
Posted: December 28, 2005 2:24 AM PST; Last modified: December 28, 2005 2:24 AM PST
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[5] Sisterwolf @ 207.69.138.7 | 28-Dec-05/7:12 PM | Reply
Second verse, lines 2 and 3 don't make a clear
statement, at least to me. Good basics here - needs spit and polish.
[9] zodiac @ 24.148.234.30 | 30-Dec-05/7:13 AM | Reply
It's a lot like being a virgin, except that you get to have sex.
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