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Disassociation (Other) by Christina
Deliverance through my mouth it all comes out... the tiny shoe, the spectacle of you You with your hallowed eyes, that bright, bright blue. You in plural - the multitudes, not single or two. For there were always many with that small shoe. But not I, I stood aloof, away from her and her and more, Away from you.

Up the ladder: I want you
Down the ladder: Up Close at a Distance

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8815
Posted: December 26, 2005 8:30 PM PST; Last modified: December 27, 2005 3:37 AM PST
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[8] zodiac @ 70.109.2.131 | 27-Dec-05/9:15 PM | Reply
Never use ellipses (...) in a poem. Ever.

Once, a reporter dared Ernest Hemmingway to write a short story in only six words. His answer - "For sale: baby shoes. Never used."
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