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Night song of Pattaya (Free verse) by Caducus Children on plinths.
Painted masterpieces.
These artists perform
dreams and hot spoons.
Grey as kerbs
who shine for ten dollars.
Moonlight bullion
fades away.
Every price
has a cost
wrapped in tarpaulin
is the never was born
and always dying.
Walk past the enamel masks
where tears and innocence hide.
Ignore the children in denier
who bark for hiding jackals
the night song of Pattaya.
Up the ladder:
Scapegoat
Down the ladder:
Stop
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Posted: November 21, 2005 7:35 AM PST; Last modified: November 21, 2005 8:46 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.089402 Overall Rank: 6278 Comments:
Grey as kerbs - grey upon grey, plinths for statues frozen in time commemorating nothing but filth.
Thank you. I always love it when I have to grab a dictionary while reading a poem. It means I'm about to learn something new.
"Masterpieces" seems an extremely poor word choice. Not only does it add nothing of significance to "painted", but "painted" doesn't add anything significant to it. They're not redundant, but they're the closest thing. And aren't these kids much more comparable to bagatelle or objets d'art, something cheap, mass-produced, and marketed for the poor unaesthetic masses?
Even better: painted-tin Virgin icons!!!
Well thanks for pushing me to raise the bar higher and you're dead right about the mass produced mercandise angle 'made in pattaya for 10 dollars' that kind of thing but harder and more concise.
Your comment has made me understand you so much more. Its funny how you pick up on the whole art/painting thing - i was going to call these kids hitlers art as he was a struggling artist (and crap) but just couldnt find the angle. I'm gonna rewrite another version of this for you zodiac. 306 view(s)
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Am I even close?
Child prostitution and the occasional murder and cover up. Noone their cares though so covering up the invisible is ironic.
As usual I'm in a happy mood lol.