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that explains it (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation
she wound her way through roots and limbs
and all around the leaves,
and travelled through the tiny water droplets
borne by the wind.
whistled through a crack in a cavern
and climbed up a ladder of moss,
skipping swiftly through the grass
of my unkempt front lawn.
she wormed her way through a knot hole
in a plank of my attic walls.
and down through the dusty ducts
of my inactive central heating and air.
sucked through my nose as i slept,
up into my brain,
she danced quite exactly the same
in my dreams
as she danced through the night before.
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Posted: August 28, 2005 7:34 PM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2005 7:34 PM PDT
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It would help if you cleaned up the capitalization, and puncuation. At 'whistled' is not a start of a sentence, but you end with a period. I have been informed that to begin a sentence with And is okay. sucked through my nose as I slept, is not a complete sentence either. I am not very strong in puncuation usuage, but I suppose you could leave it out altogether, or get some help with it.