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that explains it

Member since 2003 · Posted 28 Aug 2005 · 2 comments

she wound her way through roots and limbs and all around the leaves, and travelled through the tiny water droplets borne by the wind. whistled through a crack in a cavern and climbed up a ladder of moss, skipping swiftly through the grass of my unkempt front lawn. she wormed her way through a knot hole in a plank of my attic walls. and down through the dusty ducts of my inactive central heating and air. sucked through my nose as i slept, up into my brain, she danced quite exactly the same in my dreams as she danced through the night before.

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[7] LilMsLadyPoet 28-Aug-05/7:55 PM Reply
smile*...cute! I like this.
It would help if you cleaned up the capitalization, and puncuation. At 'whistled' is not a start of a sentence, but you end with a period. I have been informed that to begin a sentence with And is okay. sucked through my nose as I slept, is not a complete sentence either. I am not very strong in puncuation usuage, but I suppose you could leave it out altogether, or get some help with it.
[n/a] FreeFormFixation › LilMsLadyPoet 29-Aug-05/7:09 PM Reply
yeah, maybe british help