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that explains it (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation

she wound her way through roots and limbs and all around the leaves, and travelled through the tiny water droplets borne by the wind. whistled through a crack in a cavern and climbed up a ladder of moss, skipping swiftly through the grass of my unkempt front lawn. she wormed her way through a knot hole in a plank of my attic walls. and down through the dusty ducts of my inactive central heating and air. sucked through my nose as i slept, up into my brain, she danced quite exactly the same in my dreams as she danced through the night before.

LilMsLadyPoet 28-Aug-05/7:55 PM
smile*...cute! I like this.
It would help if you cleaned up the capitalization, and puncuation. At 'whistled' is not a start of a sentence, but you end with a period. I have been informed that to begin a sentence with And is okay. sucked through my nose as I slept, is not a complete sentence either. I am not very strong in puncuation usuage, but I suppose you could leave it out altogether, or get some help with it.




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