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Forever (Free verse) by Dovina
Long and loud they shouted some mocking some sincere: “Long live the king! God save the king! May the king live forever!” Some who liked the king meant: “Long live the king!” Others who revered him meant: “God save the king!” And a few who loved their king meant: “May the king live forever!” Transcending the obvious they chose the illogical hope outweighing reason happiness fate They were the weak ones not strong enough for sense silly in nostalgia happily deceived Joining them I accept the disproved deny history ignore jeers I say: “Long live our friendship! God save our friendship! May our friendship live forever!”

Up the ladder: Battered moon
Down the ladder: 9. The Second Life

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7049
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 16, 2005 7:37 PM PDT
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[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.19.32 | 17-May-05/6:12 AM | Reply
Do you really see a distinction between "Long live the king" and "May the king live forever"? What? I mean, I know you say one is what people who like the king shout, and the other is what people who love the king shout, but really.

Maybe you need another traditional thing for shouting at people. Here are some Arabic ones:

"God save you from the fire!"
"May you never taste spicy food!"
"God willing, you will shit oil!"
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 > zodiac | 17-May-05/11:22 AM | Reply
Love for the king means you might become irrational enough to say something totally affectionate like “May the king live forever!” You would not say that and mean it if you only like him. It is the distinction between “like” and “love” that I’m trying to get at here.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.138 > Dovina | 17-May-05/12:07 PM | Reply
I think stanzas three and four are close enough to delete one. I also think your goal was met in stanza two. Silly pagan. Who are you to think you can be friends with a king any how?
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 > INTRANSIT | 17-May-05/12:32 PM | Reply
It is not the king I am friends with.
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