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Free verse № 123325

Forbidden

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Apr 2005 · Edited 26 May 2005 · 2 comments

Weeping she whispered ‘I don’t want to go’ constricting me like a widows throat. ‘No one will love me as you do’ ‘Why can’t anyone see it’? from that moment I learned her fears yet couldn’t free it. We made love for centuries Kissing her body of bark Counting twenty ancient rings Carving into her flesh A grave of destiny Her mother grieves for. Our shadows lay as plinths; In a room where hands lay limp time caresses numerals With hands which strangled love, timeless; Stopping forever at twenty thirty two.

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[n/a] A. Nomaly 21-Apr-05/10:18 PM Reply
I guess I've gone cynical but these (this one and the seashore one) make me wanna throw up. Keep up the good work.
KC
[8] Dovina 26-May-05/8:33 AM Reply
If you're using punctuation, why not in widow's?