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An intolerable rash brother (Free verse) by Crakyamuni
Jesus, I'll tell yah, uninspiration is my cortisone crush then I weeped him a river, he said, hush, baby, hush It's unbecoming of your sort to fumble through the hollows Mush the mash in the pot princess, and we'll teach you to swallow See, I've been waiting for a sort of depressed type of wolfboy to use as a diaper, or bohemian chew toy shame that you spit on the soul of that satan a female no less, who brought home the bacon

Up the ladder: Open
Down the ladder: Blind Settlement

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.089402
Overall Rank: 6350
Posted: February 6, 2005 4:12 PM PST; Last modified: February 6, 2005 4:12 PM PST
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[7] Mister Cakes @ 81.168.71.189 | 7-Feb-05/3:46 PM | Reply
great
[n/a] Crakyamuni @ 131.252.230.71 > Mister Cakes | 8-Feb-05/11:59 AM | Reply

Thanks for voting.
[8] Dovina @ 17.255.240.6 | 11-Feb-05/11:50 AM | Reply
Do you mean "Cortizone" the drug, which I might have misspelled?
weeped should be "wept" in this context I think.
The soul of satin, a female, who brought home the bacon causes wonderment on whether this is about Jesus, God, or your real brother. "We'll teach you to swallow" is good.
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