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Dear Will,

by DarkThirteens

Member since 2004 · Posted 2 Jan 2005 · 4 comments

You have always been arouhd for me, the short time I've been here. You freak me out, you scare me shitless and fill me full of fear. Although you're not that normal, you act the same as Lea. And I'll bet you didn't know the fact that Lea is short for me. I know we're very different but you're almost like a twin (The mother-fucking's got to stop,) but otherwise, you're kin! I know it's short, the end is near but I've nothing left to say ,so, Goodbye, Goodnight, Cheerio and Ciao and have an awesome day.

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[n/a] DarkThirteens 2-Jan-05/10:14 AM Reply
This is a poem i wrote at 1:12 a.m. for my friend so i was half asleep. i don't expect tens. lots of inside jokes so don't freak out.
[n/a] zodiac › DarkThirteens 3-Jan-05/10:40 PM Reply
That is, indeed, no excuse. If you now excuse yourself from your earlier excuse, you'll get a triple-word-score on "bum". Please, please, whatever you do, don't.
[8] Shuushin 2-Jan-05/11:57 AM Reply
Actually has a sweat flow - was put off by two things though: "arouhd" (around), "and fill me full of fear" is a bit of an overstatement, considering you have the two lines above it. Yes, I know you need the rhyme, so get rid of one of those others (prolly "you scare...").

Slight annoyance is that I wouldn't normally pronounce "Lea" to rhyme with "me".

still - feels good.
[8] Shuushin › Shuushin 2-Jan-05/12:56 PM Reply
of course, I meant "sweet" - though sweat does flow.