poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on Dear Will, by DarkThirteens.

Shuushin2 Jan 2005

Actually has a sweat flow - was put off by two things though: "arouhd" (around), "and fill me full of fear" is a bit of an overstatement, considering you have the two lines above it. Yes, I know you need the rhyme, so get rid of one of those others (prolly "you scare...").

Slight annoyance is that I wouldn't normally pronounce "Lea" to rhyme with "me".

still - feels good.