Separation

Member since 2003 · Posted 31 Dec 2004 · 1 comment

In light of all the things I've done The face I've worn The fights I've won It seems that you And you alone Could make this house Much less a home Departure from this quaking ground From all the ghosts And frantic sounds Leaves no time to Remonstrate for Love forsworn Comes borne of hate

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[9] Dovina 31-Dec-04/8:56 AM Reply

A comma after remonstrate would relieve some ambiguity. And conventional spacing would help. It's quite good, really, just hard to wade through at first.