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Separation (Free verse) by MacFrantic

In light of all the things I've done The face I've worn The fights I've won It seems that you And you alone Could make this house Much less a home Departure from this quaking ground From all the ghosts And frantic sounds Leaves no time to Remonstrate for Love forsworn Comes borne of hate

Dovina 31-Dec-04/8:56 AM
A comma after remonstrate would relieve some ambiguity. And conventional spacing would help. It's quite good, really, just hard to wade through at first.




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