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This chaotic mind (Free verse) by Bobjim
What I'd give for an organized mind, Instead of this chaotic kind. It never recalls the simplest fact, There's nothing but trouble and plenty of that. Common sense there's none to be seen, Only chaos and it reigns supreme. A thought one minute, forgotten the next. Tis a problem with which I'm often vexed. It wanders free and out of control, It will get me one day in a hell of a hole.

Up the ladder: Happy To Be Me
Down the ladder: Sleepy Hollow

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.6666667
Weighted score: 4.72186
Overall Rank: 11852
Posted: December 21, 2004 2:46 PM PST; Last modified: December 21, 2004 2:46 PM PST
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[2] nentwined @ 64.60.192.130 | 21-Dec-04/3:49 PM | Reply
You did an amazing job or horrible rhymes and nailing the (limited) point through the coffin well into the opposite end of the world.

It seems like you're mind's pretty organized if it can hammer on that one point 10 rhyming lines. Or is it just that you'd forgotten you'd written the previous two each time?
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