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Guinness (Free verse) by Dovina
  His friends walk out at midnight from Dargan’s Pub and Ale House. He thinks about driving home, then orders another brew.   “I’m a good guy with a few habits,” he says, and slapping his Guinness on the bar, “I work hard and like a good time.”   As we share a final beer, he refuses to blame a woman, does not even accuse the help. What a good sport he is. I give him style points for honesty.   He’s a good man to talk to, goes down like a pina colada, smooth and sweet.

Up the ladder: almost missed work
Down the ladder: Pathetic lill' me..

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.0238404
Overall Rank: 7412
Posted: November 24, 2004 6:22 PM PST; Last modified: November 24, 2004 6:22 PM PST
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Comments:
[5] celticskatermatt1 @ 68.7.187.148 | 25-Nov-04/4:57 PM | Reply
what a gay poem
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > celticskatermatt1 | 25-Nov-04/9:40 PM | Reply
Only if you decide to interpret it that way.
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.217.93 | 25-Nov-04/5:37 PM | Reply
This sounds like an accurately kept transcript of the night. The last stanza could be the first and nothing would be lost.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Dan garcia-Black | 25-Nov-04/9:44 PM | Reply
I omitted a few items from the transcript.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.153.196.50 | 25-Nov-04/6:23 PM | Reply
Do any of your poemes rhyme? I just tried going through the rigmarole of checking each one to see, but only got through the first three before thinking "Sod this, I'll just ask her if any of them rhyme". Well? Do they? Nearly all my poemes rhyme.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 25-Nov-04/9:53 PM | Reply
Yes, in "Solitude" I rhymed foe with abode whch stands to this day as one of poemranker's finest and most unusual iambic vowel chimes.
[10] blacksoul @ 204.215.33.170 | 28-Nov-04/4:11 AM | Reply
Sounds like a man i know who worked for thirty years and raised five children.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > blacksoul | 28-Nov-04/9:19 AM | Reply
I pity his wife and would like to be one of his friends at the pub.
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