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Library Window (Free verse) by steven adams
The sky is grey The clouds are dark I search as I may to find my mark With books that surround me filled with knowledge to see Why do I keep looking up?

Up the ladder: Timber!
Down the ladder: L'Étoile

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.3333335
Weighted score: 6.1666665
Overall Rank: 1032
Posted: October 14, 2004 2:39 PM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2004 2:39 PM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 24.52.156.155 | 14-Oct-04/3:56 PM | Reply
In Verse 1, the two couplets seem unrelated until I get to the last line of Verse 2. The first 2 lines of Verse 2 seem choppy and wordy. It's a good thought, but you might want to consider rearranging the lines.
[1] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 17-Oct-04/9:31 AM | Reply
You've got to be kidding?
This is an unavigatable floater.
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