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Library Window (Free verse) by steven adams The sky is grey
The clouds are dark
I search as I may
to find my mark
With books that surround me
filled with knowledge to see
Why do I keep looking up?
Up the ladder:
Timber!
Down the ladder:
The Riddle of Creation
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Posted: October 14, 2004 2:39 PM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2004 2:39 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.1666665 Overall Rank: 1031 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.156.155
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14-Oct-04/3:56 PM
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In Verse 1, the two couplets seem unrelated until I get to the last line of Verse 2. The first 2 lines of Verse 2 seem choppy and wordy. It's a good thought, but you might want to consider rearranging the lines.
You've got to be kidding?
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