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The Distance Fighter (Free verse) by shit
I am a single soldier to destroy a whole fleet I am a 2 year kid to stop the traffic of Tokyo streets Armed with an ordinary bow, an arrow or two I will shoot the distance between me and you I´ll start to study maybe the laws of science are wrong Clock by clock I´ll try to bring back that night when you´re gone I´ll touch the world´s heart with a guitar and a blues Tell me, baby, If that wouldn´t melt the distance between me and you I´ll ask the sun to help me too and in the summer vanish I will put my tears in every glass so people will taste my anguish I´ll make the stars shine my love with the purest silver light Will they help us baby? Will they let us enjoy our love in delight? I will get my body in shape and climb all the mountains I will build an elvish boat and cross all the waters I die, I live, I laugh, I bleed, I´ll change my manners and turn into a priest But only until I siege the castle and ruin the distance between you and me Well if this distance is made of ice, It´s no problem for me I´ll build a giant fire and melt all the Antartid for thee If it doesn´t work I can require my friend Sun back There´s nothing I won´t do, honey, to fill your lack If this cruel cruel distance is a great high wall I have some friends in Jotunhein so man, be ready to fall If it´s a puzzle to be done, I´ll cry for help in Avalon There´s no chance can´t you see that this road can beat me I also can try to dismantle the distance between you and me Would it work If I opened my path brick by brick? Or just try to erase all the highways and miles Or even gather some templars to save the Holy Land of your eyes I´ll change my place with Aphrodite If this is a matter of beauty, I am sure their eyes have never fell over someone so pretty You can see baby I have the love and the strength I need To diminish this distance between you and me The only border that can keep me from walking my course Is if it gets burned the bridge between my heart and yours If you surrender during my fight and stop loving me like before Sorry love, but I´ll turn back, gather my stuff and proudly desert my war.

Up the ladder: Gibberish
Down the ladder: Whalecrack

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.5
Weighted score: 4.7019925
Overall Rank: 11996
Posted: August 25, 2004 10:41 PM PDT; Last modified: August 25, 2004 10:41 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] zodiac @ 217.23.37.85 | 26-Aug-04/6:39 AM | Reply
Dear bleedingrose,

You've made a grammatickal (or otherwise-sensickal) mistake in nearly every line of this post. Please, please stop offending the world with the terribleness of your writing. Thanks,

zodiac

[n/a] shit @ 200.158.158.119 > zodiac | 1-Sep-04/3:33 AM | Reply
thanx for being so nice!
[6] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 26-Aug-04/12:02 PM | Reply
Please ignore zodiac. You have some errors, but punctuation would cure a lot of them. You have something to say here, but it's too verbose and not well organized. Don't give up.
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