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Free verse № 110175

Openings

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Aug 2004 · 1 comment

Shadows in a mystery hall, shedding a light that shows all. There is something more then meets the eye, somethings there that gets me high. Soft melodies whispering in my ears, the joyish things i wish to hear. The light in my heart grows more strong, beating like the perfect song. The hall becomes a wide open field, inside of which i have no fears. Time leaves me breathless in this perfection, so much that i start to lose my complection. I'll leave you there to die or hope, and no, i wont bring you a bag of dope.

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[n/a] sir_heff 10-Sep-04/8:40 AM Reply
i wrote this with my g/f, she wrote the first line, i did the second and so on...
she thinks i f*cked the ending up...